句子控制与修辞修改练习单 · 十年级
句子控制与修辞修改：诊断句子边界和不完整从句。初始包含8项练习。附答案或作答指导。支持Letter/A4打印，或在打印窗口保存PDF。
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句子控制与修辞修改
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Draft: The club should record equipment loans, it will help members find tools. The current notebook lists a borrower’s name but not a return time. Last Tuesday, two members searched for a camera while it was at a supervised activity. Because no return time was recorded. A board could show who has an item and when it is expected back. The board would make everything efficient and solve all our problems. Members should enter a name, stating a return time, and check the item on return. “It” may be seen by visitors, so private contact information should not be displayed. The proposal needs one person to check the board at closing.
示例：“The team checked the claim, it lacked evidence”仅用逗号连接两个独立分句；改为“The team checked the claim and found that it lacked evidence”明确关系。 根据材料完成各项任务，按要求作答。
1.解释“The club should record equipment loans, it will help members find tools.”的句子边界问题并修改。 Explain the sentence-boundary problem in “The club should record equipment loans, it will help members find tools.” and revise it.
2.解释“Because no return time was recorded.”为何作为独立句不完整，并与相关完整意思合并。 Explain why “Because no return time was recorded.” is incomplete as written. Combine it with a relevant complete idea.
3.修改“Members should enter a name, stating a return time, and check the item on return.”使结构平行，指出对应形式。 Revise “Members should enter a name, stating a return time, and check the item on return.” for parallel structure. Identify the matching forms.
4.找出草稿中指代不清的“It”，用准确名词短语替换并解释。 Find the ambiguous “It” in the draft. Replace it with a precise noun phrase and explain the reference.
5.限定“The board would make everything efficient and solve all our problems.”，同时保留提案目的。 Qualify “The board would make everything efficient and solve all our problems.” while keeping the proposal’s purpose.
6.将草稿改为两个连贯段：目的与支持、条件与评估；修正语法，不添加虚构证据。 Rewrite the draft as two coherent paragraphs: purpose and support, then conditions and evaluation. Fix the targeted grammar without adding invented evidence.
7.把一项建议改为面向工作人员的礼貌表达，说明语域变化及如何保持内容。 Adapt one recommendation into a polite sentence for a staff audience. Explain how the register changes without weakening its content.
8.解释哪两项修改最能改善意思而非外观，引用原文与改文。 Explain which two revisions most improve meaning rather than appearance. Cite the original and your change.
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句子控制与修辞修改
关于设备的草稿
Draft: The club should record equipment loans, it will help members find tools. The current notebook lists a borrower’s name but not a return time. Last Tuesday, two members searched for a camera while it was at a supervised activity. Because no return time was recorded. A board could show who has an item and when it is expected back. The board would make everything efficient and solve all our problems. Members should enter a name, stating a return time, and check the item on return. “It” may be seen by visitors, so private contact information should not be displayed. The proposal needs one person to check the board at closing.
示例：“The team checked the claim, it lacked evidence”仅用逗号连接两个独立分句；改为“The team checked the claim and found that it lacked evidence”明确关系。 根据材料完成各项任务，按要求作答。
1.解释“The club should record equipment loans, it will help members find tools.”的句子边界问题并修改。 Explain the sentence-boundary problem in “The club should record equipment loans, it will help members find tools.” and revise it.
- 准确使用指定英语结构，意思符合要求。
- 展示修改后的语言，解释对意思、衔接或读者的影响。
一种参考回答： The original joins two independent clauses with only a comma. Revision: The club should record equipment loans so members can find tools more easily.
2.解释“Because no return time was recorded.”为何作为独立句不完整，并与相关完整意思合并。 Explain why “Because no return time was recorded.” is incomplete as written. Combine it with a relevant complete idea.
- 准确使用指定英语结构，意思符合要求。
- 展示修改后的语言，解释对意思、衔接或读者的影响。
一种参考回答： The dependent clause cannot stand as a complete sentence here. Revision: Two members searched for a camera because no return time was recorded.
3.修改“Members should enter a name, stating a return time, and check the item on return.”使结构平行，指出对应形式。 Revise “Members should enter a name, stating a return time, and check the item on return.” for parallel structure. Identify the matching forms.
- 准确使用指定英语结构，意思符合要求。
- 展示修改后的语言，解释对意思、衔接或读者的影响。
一种参考回答： Members should enter a name, state a return time and check the item on return. The coordinated actions now use matching base-form verbs instead of mixing a base verb with an -ing form.
4.找出草稿中指代不清的“It”，用准确名词短语替换并解释。 Find the ambiguous “It” in the draft. Replace it with a precise noun phrase and explain the reference.
- 准确使用指定英语结构，意思符合要求。
- 展示修改后的语言，解释对意思、衔接或读者的影响。
一种参考回答： The board may be seen by visitors, so private contact information should not be displayed. The explicit subject names the intended object instead of leaving the reader to choose among nearby nouns.
5.限定“The board would make everything efficient and solve all our problems.”，同时保留提案目的。 Qualify “The board would make everything efficient and solve all our problems.” while keeping the proposal’s purpose.
- 展示修改后的语言，解释对意思、衔接或读者的影响。
- 区分报告的证据、推断与未经验证的可能性。
- 保留来源含义、限定条件和发言者归属。
一种参考回答： The board could make loans easier to track, but it still needs regular checking.
6.将草稿改为两个连贯段：目的与支持、条件与评估；修正语法，不添加虚构证据。 Rewrite the draft as two coherent paragraphs: purpose and support, then conditions and evaluation. Fix the targeted grammar without adding invented evidence.
- 展示修改后的语言，解释对意思、衔接或读者的影响。
- 准确使用指定英语结构，意思符合要求。
- 保留来源含义、限定条件和发言者归属。
- 用连贯、标点正确的英语回答所有要求的部分。
一种参考回答： The club should record equipment loans so members can find tools more easily. Two members searched for a camera because no return time was recorded. Members should enter a name, state a return time and check the item on return. The board could make loans easier to track, but it still needs regular checking. The board may be seen by visitors, so private contact information should not be displayed. The proposal should be evaluated with the comparison or follow-up described in the original draft.
7.把一项建议改为面向工作人员的礼貌表达，说明语域变化及如何保持内容。 Adapt one recommendation into a polite sentence for a staff audience. Explain how the register changes without weakening its content.
- 准确使用指定英语结构，意思符合要求。
- 展示修改后的语言，解释对意思、衔接或读者的影响。
- 接受有材料与推理支持的其他解读。
一种参考回答： Could staff consider the proposed trial and review its results? The request is less forceful than a guarantee but still identifies an action and evaluation.
8.解释哪两项修改最能改善意思而非外观，引用原文与改文。 Explain which two revisions most improve meaning rather than appearance. Cite the original and your change.
- 展示修改后的语言，解释对意思、衔接或读者的影响。
- 解释材料中的具体细节，不能只说手法名称或重复主张。
- 接受有材料与推理支持的其他解读。
一种参考回答： Replacing “The board would make everything efficient and solve all our problems.” with “The board could make loans easier to track, but it still needs regular checking.” makes the evidence scope clearer. Replacing “It” with the noun phrase in “The board may be seen by visitors, so private contact information should not be displayed.” prevents an unclear reference. Other text-based priorities are acceptable.
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十年级 · 英语语言与读写 · 包含对应答案 · 支持 US Letter 和 A4
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- 从这项任务开始：解释“The club should record equipment loans, it will help members find tools.”的句子边界问题并修改。
- 结合这项任务讨论：修改“Members should enter a name, stating a return time, and check the item on return.”使结构平行，指出对应形式。
- 请学生应用所学：将草稿改为两个连贯段：目的与支持、条件与评估；修正语法，不添加虚构证据。
值得讨论的常见错误
修改须保留意思，修正标点不能证明缺乏支持的主张。
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来源参考： CCSS语言与写作修改目标.
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句子控制与修辞修改：应用与创作
关于设备的草稿
Draft: The club should record equipment loans, it will help members find tools. The current notebook lists a borrower’s name but not a return time. Last Tuesday, two members searched for a camera while it was at a supervised activity. Because no return time was recorded. A board could show who has an item and when it is expected back. The board would make everything efficient and solve all our problems. Members should enter a name, stating a return time, and check the item on return. “It” may be seen by visitors, so private contact information should not be displayed. The proposal needs one person to check the board at closing.
运用所学知识进行解释、创作或应用。
1.将草稿改为两个连贯段：目的与支持、条件与评估；修正语法，不添加虚构证据。 Rewrite the draft as two coherent paragraphs: purpose and support, then conditions and evaluation. Fix the targeted grammar without adding invented evidence.
句子控制与修辞修改：应用与创作
应用 · 独立完成 · 30 分钟
诊断句子边界和不完整从句。 修改平行结构、指代及缺乏支持的确定性。 为衔接和读者重写，保留原文事实。 针对应用与创作的练习。可查看对应学习单元的活动顺序和教学指南。
句子控制与修辞修改：探索与讲解
关于设备的草稿
Draft: The club should record equipment loans, it will help members find tools. The current notebook lists a borrower’s name but not a return time. Last Tuesday, two members searched for a camera while it was at a supervised activity. Because no return time was recorded. A board could show who has an item and when it is expected back. The board would make everything efficient and solve all our problems. Members should enter a name, stating a return time, and check the item on return. “It” may be seen by visitors, so private contact information should not be displayed. The proposal needs one person to check the board at closing.
示例：“The team checked the claim, it lacked evidence”仅用逗号连接两个独立分句；改为“The team checked the claim and found that it lacked evidence”明确关系。 阅读或观察材料，在适当帮助下说明你的推理。
1.解释“The club should record equipment loans, it will help members find tools.”的句子边界问题并修改。 Explain the sentence-boundary problem in “The club should record equipment loans, it will help members find tools.” and revise it.
句子控制与修辞修改：探索与讲解
探索 · 独立完成 · 15 分钟
诊断句子边界和不完整从句。 修改平行结构、指代及缺乏支持的确定性。 为衔接和读者重写，保留原文事实。 针对探索与讲解的练习。可查看对应学习单元的活动顺序和教学指南。
句子控制与修辞修改：独立练习
关于设备的草稿
Draft: The club should record equipment loans, it will help members find tools. The current notebook lists a borrower’s name but not a return time. Last Tuesday, two members searched for a camera while it was at a supervised activity. Because no return time was recorded. A board could show who has an item and when it is expected back. The board would make everything efficient and solve all our problems. Members should enter a name, stating a return time, and check the item on return. “It” may be seen by visitors, so private contact information should not be displayed. The proposal needs one person to check the board at closing.
根据材料完成各项任务，按要求作答。
1.修改“Members should enter a name, stating a return time, and check the item on return.”使结构平行，指出对应形式。 Revise “Members should enter a name, stating a return time, and check the item on return.” for parallel structure. Identify the matching forms.
句子控制与修辞修改：独立练习
练习 · 独立完成 · 25 分钟
诊断句子边界和不完整从句。 修改平行结构、指代及缺乏支持的确定性。 为衔接和读者重写，保留原文事实。 针对独立练习的练习。可查看对应学习单元的活动顺序和教学指南。